This Untitled is an experimental action piece i wrote in November last year if i remember correctly. I’m not sure how many people are going to find this interesting and I don’t even know if the action is good or not, but this was worth a shot. I wrote it after playing too much of Batman:Arkham Asylum and watching The Dark Knight Rises!

It was another hot day in India. The sun was up, so was the temperature. It was the wind that was down. But that never stops the youth from having fun, does it?

In a huge park somewhere in Delhi, there was a group of friends, about 17-18. Huge bottles of coke, snacks and music, the perfect plan, isn’t it? In the loud music, there was a huge boy, dancing with no care in the world. Long hair, a huge beard and extra bulky, wearing a green cargoes and a very baggy white t-shirt. As his friends either danced with him or walked away from his madness, he still didn’t care.

“Wait, guys stop the music,” shouted in his heavy voice.

“What happened?” his friends shouted in unison, surprised at the sudden change in his behavior.

“Quick, keep quiet and turn the music off.”

After a few seconds of the silence, a friend of his, short in height and a bit fat blurted out in equal parts anger and bafflement, “What the hell man?”

“Shhhh…… didn’t you hear that?”He spoke referring to a voice only he could hear.

Suddenly, the stationary hair of all the adolescents started flying in all directions.

“Uh-oh, get back now, everyone,” he shouted, having a serious expression as he performed a back flip. A figure came down at astonishing speed and kicked where the boy was standing, producing a large crack in the park.

“You know, for such a bulky person, you are quite flexible.” The figure exclaimed. He had a rather sly smile, and a not as serious tone. He was tall, but shorter than the boy. He was not nearly as bulky, but boasted a rather moderate build.

The boy only shook his head at his appearance.

“What? Not happy to see me? Last time I checked, you loved a good challenge,” he said.

“I’m out. So you leave.”

As soon as he finished, the man moved towards him with astonishing speed. As he drew his hand out for a clothesline, the boy ducked and rolled behind him. As soon as the man turned, he kicked him in the face.

The man got pushed back a bit. He then recovered and drew his left hand out for a punch, which was blocked by the boy’s right forearm. The man then punched using his right hand, which the boy blocked and hen chopped. Seizing the opportunity, the boy struck by hitting his opponent in the face with his elbow.

Soon, the man’s expression started to change to an angrier one. The boy then flipped over the man, grabbing his neck and throwing him on the ground with himself.

As soon as they fell, the man loosened the grip on his neck and quickly jumped to his feet. He then tried to stomp the boy, who successfully dodged it by jumping to his feet. He then delivered a roundhouse kick, causing his opponent to hold his cheek in pain.

“Rather weak, aren’t you?’ The boy said, mocking his opponent’s feeble skills.

The man then rushed towards the boy, his face glowing red with anger. He quickly threw a barrage of powerful punches towards the boy, some he dodged, some he blocked and some hit him hard. Soon the boy started to lose his balance, and fell down when the man pushed him. As he tried to roll away, the man delivered a punt to his head, successfully connecting.

As the boy kept on rolling, he took out a few small pearls from his cargoes and threw them on the ground. As soon as they hit the ground, they produced a lot of smoke.

The man roared, angry at his adversary’s cheap trick

“You see, while you grow tired of theatricality and deception, I am still very fond of it,” the boy smoke in a much more relaxed tone.

As the smoke settled, both of them ran towards each other and exchanged various blows. The boy efficiently released a dagger from his sleeve and proceeded to slash the man a few times.

“No space for wasted moves,” the man said.

The boy took out another dagger and ran towards his opponent. The man threw his heavy right hand at the boy, which he swiftly dodged and then proceeded to stab him with the daggers. One dagger was embedded in his wrist while the other one between his knuckles.  Then in a heartbeat, he grabbed hold of the tow and kicked the man backwards. The daggers moved through his skin, causing the man to writhe and curse the boy in agony.

The boy then held his daggers in his hands and assumed a battle stance. The man on the other hand, was bleeding profusely.

“I see now, peace didn’t cost you your strength. Neither has victory defeated you. But remember this, you are never out. The League is back, and all the members are back too, even if you left.”

The boy ran towards the man, his daggers ready to slice him open.  The man slowly raised his bloodied hand and explosions proceeded to take place. The boy got startled and stopped and a shadowy figure in a fast moving hover board grabbed the man and flew away. The boy simply looked on in bafflement, as did his friends at him and at what just happened.


6 thoughts on “Untitled-3

  1. Dude, it’s a fabulously written scene. However, there’s a lot of redundancy in the action sequence. It’s confusing for the layman to understand this battle between “man” and “boy.” It would be useful to use diverse vocab here so that the scene becomes more clear to visualize.
    Otherwise, the action is very good, once a person fully understands it. 🙂 you write well, I don’t even need to keep reiterating it.

    • Thank you for the criticism!(People don’t criticize me much so this is a good welcome!). I tried to give it a shot, i refrained from using any sort of wrestling terms because they got a bit more confusing! I’ll try my best in making a better one!

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